LIVE CRITIQUE: Introducing Multiple Protagonists

In this episode, we meet a gold-digger with a mission…

Run the Gauntlet (RTG) is a free monthly program where one lucky writer receives a developmental edit of their opening scenes. The feedback is recorded in real-time, on-screen, and then posted publicly so that other writers can share in the insights garnered.

In this live critique:

A big thanks to Mandy Newman for sharing the opening scenes of her commercial women’s fiction novel. In the opening scene of “Cossington” we meet Lizzie, a woman who has her eye set on a man who could give her the life of luxury she craves. But is Lizzie our heroine, or villain? And how does her greater role in the story impact the opening hook?

This episode of RTG looks at:

• Working with multiple protagonists.
• Identifying the fundamentals needed to ensure a reader is emotionally invested in the characters.
• Balancing the intensity of detail and description.

View a PDF copy of the edited scenes and comments featured in this episode.

Would you like to Run the Gauntlet?

Submit your scenes to RTG and if you’re selected, you’ll receive a free developmental edit.

Special offer

Alternatively, I have a special offer for those who’d prefer a private assessment of their opening scenes. This offer includes a discount off my regular fee and is exclusive to my Run the Gauntlet audience.

What did you think of Mandy’s scenes and the feedback offered?

We’d love to hear your constructive comments below!